Tuesday, August 12, 2014

ESSAY #1

    Although the concept of losing an intrinsic element of one's life may be devastating news in the moment, change can also be an enlightenment to a new world of perspectives or possibly even a new way of life. In The Poisonwood Bible, Leah Price embodies the Christian way of life due to her dad's devotion as a missionary. After experiencing life in the Congo, she develops into an individual who forms her own opinions and philosophies on life even rebelling against her father's. This new environment serves as a double-edged sword for Leah. She has no choice but to break away from her accommodating homeland and to adjust to new grounds that actually structures her life.
    Leah had wholeheartedly followed her dad's religious beliefs; she was blinded by the innate nature of religion in the Price household. At the age of fifteen, Leah had to move from America to the small village of Kilanga in the Congo. There, she continued to follow her father's footsteps and revolved around the Americanized mind set. To prove his usefulness, Reverend Nathan, with Leah, planted a demonstrative garden. Mama Tataba, a Kilanga denizen, suggested that they build little hills for the seeds, but Mr. Price and Leah were adamant about sticking to their procedures. This situation represents the tension between two different cultures coming to a middle ground. Leah plays the role of standing by her traditional values, not letting go of her old ways, while Mama Tataba serves as the bulldozer trying to break that barrier. Leah expresses multiple times the oddness of this new culture. She finds it surprising to see girls her age already married and with kids. 
    Gradually, her outlook begins to change. Leah's first sign of rebellion begins with her adventures with Pascal. She explores the Congolese culture chewing sugarcane and secretly invites him to the kitchen without her parent's approval. Decades pass, and her admiration towards the African culture grows. Her relationship with Anatole, a schoolteacher and translator, establishes her desire to continue her adventure in the Congo. Her sudden adaptation even causes a division between her and her father, but at heart she knows she is where she wants to be. As the story progresses, Leah develops into a mature character who is able to learn on her own by being thrown into a new world of ideas. 
    Leah knew of no other form of moral standards but surrounding herself in a completely new culture opened her eyes to the rest of the world. She had no say in this life changing decision, but it ultimately brought her to the place she wanted to be, with her husband, Anatole, and four lively sons. Although Leah had to realize her father's zeal for religion ended up harming what was important, family, she was able to discover her true self as a human and a woman during this adaptation. 

6 comments:

  1. This is a solid essay, but I don't think you entirely answered the prompt...HOWEVER! There are still many positives to be taken and a few criticisms to be given. Your introduction is great, I especially like your beginning-it's eye catching and interesting. I just think you lack one sentence of summarizing your thesis. I think the line of examples from the story and summarizing the story was smudged just a bit. Your vocabulary throughout your entire piece is excellent: "..her fathers zeal for religion.." "..concept of losing an intrinsic element.." Good stuff. It really elevated your writing. Overall, it was good writing.

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    1. Thank you for commenting Imanie! I definitely have to agree with your critique. Reading it over, I noticed that I strayed alway from the given topic and summarized a little too much. Thanks again.

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  2. I believe that you started this essay extremely well and used very good vocabulary throughout the entire essay. Your first sentence was very bold and stuck out to me the most, good way to start an essay! I wanted to keep reading! As the essay went on I feel that you lost the strength you first began with. The concluding paragraph was not as bold as that first sentence in the introduction. You presented good ideas and answered the prompt but kind of in a confusing manner. Try and state it more obviously, but your great vocabulary and extensive sentences really carried you on this assignment!

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  3. Thanks Courtney! I will definitely take that advice of being more consistent: starting strong and ending bold.

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  4. JUDY!!! I liked that you went with Leah and developed her character. I thought your thesis was clearly stated and you outlined your essay in the intro. I thought there was a little summarizing going on but I did that too so we just have to develop an editing eye which comes with time. I thought you developed Leah's character well but I didn't really find the main idea or theme of the whole book which was one of the questions. I might have missed it and I apologize if I did. You had nice transitions and specific examples which helps to your education of the book but maybe not so much as the analyzing part of it. Overall I think this is a starting place and it is a good place to be starting!:) I don't want to discourage you because you did a lot of things right so keep pushing forward!

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  5. Oh my dear sweet Judith, I thought overall your essay was very clear and supported your thesis, and I also really liked your good use of vocabulary. I thought you did a nice job of steering away from summarizing in your introduction paragraph, but there was some summarization within the body. The development of Leah as a character was well constructed and you used strong textual evidence that helped backed up your examples. I felt that the conclusion could've been stronger and the moral of the story could've been more obvious. All together, it was a nice essay and you are a good writer so don't be discouraged because you can only grow from here!

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